Had A Talk with My Teacher About the Idea and....

 Ok, so, continuing from the last post, I approached my teacher with my idea, and she wasn't very fond of it. She said that it would lack shot selection and wouldn't express my techniques learned in her class. Oh, and she also said that my opening is too similar to the beginning of "Whiplash", it's funny because I did draw major inspiration from that opening and I was starting to realize that my opening is strikingly similar to Whiplash.  So, I had thought my opening would leave the audience to question "what's next?'', but my teacher told me that there would have to be a purpose and that the audience would have to care for that character. Why is this monologue so important? Why should the audience care? What can be the possible outcome of this and how would it affect the character? These were the questions that I and my teacher were discussing and the questions that were looming in my mind. 

So, I recommended to my teacher that there would be some internal conflict with the character, some sort of loneliness, or the feeling of being out of place. She liked this idea, so I kept that in mind. First things first, I wanted to get the monologue portion out of the way. I feel like it's a very crucial moment for the character and the monologue is a monologue that holds great value to me. So, that weekend, I worked on the storyboard, it took me around an hour or two to finish, but it came out nicely. Here's a picture 

The handwriting and drawing aren't the neatest but it's no big deal. Practically, the monologue scene is one very long shot that's zooming out slowly, and I'm aiming to include some shots from the audience's perspective as well. 

Anyways, here's some fancy links to the monologue and the opening scene of Whiplash

Whiplash Opening Scene

Death of a Salesman - American Perspective (weebly.com)